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"Secret Cries of a Long Lost Stone"

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"Secret Cries of a Long Lost Stone"
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Secret Cries of a Long Lost Stone

Underworld whispers embrace these
Scarred and bared knees
That I’ve eaten since
I became old again

This filthy swamp I drown in
Unveils the very spoon upon
The lips of thrilling flesh
Which sacrifices souls fallen apart

An early rose bended over
The story of winds
Eclipsing the garbage in my tears

Drops of blood decided to take
My nails for a walk across
The sea bottom painted by
The pain of dying leaves

Tribe of logs describes
The bitter dust I have thrown
Myself into, for I had failed pondering
For the sentence which takes
Heartache away from my miserable grave

Every pore of mine is craving
For mobility so I can search for
This fresh creature, amusing, yet
Lost in the storm of impure thoughts
I had produced for hollow years,
Claiming my demonic solitude

Every silver swan
Floating on your breath
Makes the butterflies consume
My stomach hard enough that I
Feel raped by your innocent soul

Weak is and pathetic
My own view of the Sun
In my dreams worlds collide,
Time quietly stops in your hands
And doom blooms into new era
On your skin

Inace, nije dovrsena, imam jos mnogo svrljotina koje mi se bas ne uklapaju, barem ne sad, u ovom delu, mada imam veliki skok kod zadnje napisane strofe...



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Velika slova su posledica pisanja kratkih redova na sredini u Wordu2003. Sto se interpunkcije tice, namerno sam je izostavio, jer hocu da vi sami, citaoci, ne shvatite, vec prozivite pesmu na sopstveni nacin, osecajuci bol onako kako vas sam razjeda-upravo vas same, a ne mene... Citajte pesmu za sebe, ne trudite se da prokljuvite sta je pisac hteo da kaze, smatrajte je poklonom..!



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WOW,thats very inspiring.Koliko si je dugo smisljao?

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Ma nije jos gotova, ali je zeznuto teska, jer su to MOJe misli napisane zbog MENE... samo ih ja razumem... i jos dvoje-troje ljudi...

Imam jos hrpe "materijala"...

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Bitch,answer to my question.Kidding.

Ajde der objasni ih meni

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Polako, sacekaj da dodjem kuci (29.12.)...

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Sjajno. Sounds great! Hvala na poklonu.

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